Unwanted guest

April 2, 2011

Written by Ina

87 Comments

~{}~

filled with your absence

the house and I wait

both knowing it is everywhere

 

in the living room it is blocking the telly

and in the bathroom mirror

it is your face not being there

that I see

 

at night I can hear

your absence soundlessly sneaking up the stairs

claiming the bed

and it won’t stay on your half

grabbing all blankets

 

your absence is becoming a frequent guest now

demanding attention

keeping me busy

filling the house

till you come back

~{}~

 

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  1. belfastdavid said:
    April 3, 2011 at 12:21

    This terrific Ina,

    I have read it three or four times to get the full meaning and appreciated it more each time.

    I will likely be back to read it again 🙂

    • Ina said:
      April 3, 2011 at 12:24

      🙂 You made my day thanks!
      I wanted a sort of abstract idea as a touchable existence lol. (This sounds more complicated than it is really) I am trying one now with death as such.

      Hope you had a good night in spite of cracks.

  2. thingy said:
    April 6, 2011 at 18:22

    Wow. This is so good. Wow.

  3. Jingle said:
    April 6, 2011 at 19:20

    amazing expression…

    🙂

  4. Vinay said:
    April 6, 2011 at 20:16

    strangely enough, I can relate to that. I feel this poem, Ina, and it does speak to me. the absence of someone can leave such an impression on us that it takes on a silhouette, that is incomplete, unwanted. Just an outline, when we wish for a filled art 🙂 liked it very much!

  5. poetsandall said:
    April 6, 2011 at 20:46

    this is a very emotional poem. well done,I love it

  6. KRM said:
    April 6, 2011 at 20:56

    Absence can be consuming, inescapable, and unwelcomed. You have expressed that so well here. Beautiful and deeply moving.

  7. Marit said:
    April 6, 2011 at 20:56

    “your absence is becoming a frequent guest now”

    my favorite line ❤

  8. magher1 said:
    April 6, 2011 at 21:10

    You expressed the frustration of missing a beloved person so accurately. Nice work! 🙂

  9. Jack Edwards said:
    April 6, 2011 at 22:14

    Great poem I love the personification in ‘the house and I wait’. Well done

  10. Linda said:
    April 6, 2011 at 22:14

    Great connection between absence and presence. Wonderfully worded. A nice twist.

    http://absolutepalaver.wordpress.com/2011/04/01/thus/

  11. Linda said:
    April 6, 2011 at 22:18

    Idon’t think my first comment went through, so I’ll write it again. I absolutely love the connection between absence and presence.

    http://absolutepalaver.wordpress.com/2011/04/01/thus/

  12. JL Dodge said:
    April 6, 2011 at 22:39

    Abscence makes the heart grow fonder !
    Nice post for the Rally
    ENJOY
    JL&B

  13. athursdayschild has a long way to go and much to be thankful for. said:
    April 6, 2011 at 22:51

    I automatically think of my husband and only hope I never have to endure very long absences. Wonderfully written.

  14. dthaase said:
    April 6, 2011 at 22:56

    wow – you nailed this – excellent poetry, well done!

  15. Paulami said:
    April 6, 2011 at 22:58

    absence is what makes presence unbearable at one point…loved the poem…loved it much!

  16. Tasha said:
    April 6, 2011 at 23:39

    The frustration and longing really comes through, fantastic poem!

  17. Umamaheswari.A said:
    April 7, 2011 at 03:04

    “your absence is becoming a frequent guest now
    demanding attention
    keeping me busy
    filling the house
    till you come back” what a meaningful para..loved it.

  18. Julian Javier the Cyber Mushroom said:
    April 7, 2011 at 07:31

    nicely delivered. i love it! i love the flow and how you conveyed the thoughts of missing someone and that someone might no longer come back. really felt the emotion in the words.

    please check mine too: “Beyond Silent Wars”

  19. Sam said:
    April 7, 2011 at 08:55

    When the waiting becomes too much to handle… lovely poem Ina…

  20. ladynimue said:
    April 7, 2011 at 09:37

    Its amazing how absence reminds us a lot more of the person’s presence in the house ..

    Wonderful lines !

  21. Chimnese said:
    April 7, 2011 at 10:00

    The absence is the longing, still reminding that he was still there..that through everything that went pass, something is still loss..

    here is my link : http://mypoetrywriting.blogspot.com/2011/04/postcard-from-heaven.html

  22. fiveloaf said:
    April 7, 2011 at 15:40

    a new style? its great ina and tq for coming by mine..

  23. seabell said:
    April 7, 2011 at 18:36

    What a nice way to tell “missing”!

  24. Sina Saberi said:
    April 7, 2011 at 18:40

    wow…i almost shed a tear 😦

  25. Olivia said:
    April 7, 2011 at 19:49

    lolsssss

    Et..? Nah.. love!!
    Beautiful words and amazingly composed.. kudos

    Hugs xox

  26. Ina said:
    April 7, 2011 at 20:31

    Thank you very much all fiveloaf seabell sina and olivia 🙂

  27. Broken Sparkles said:
    April 7, 2011 at 21:24

    Oh, that’s in absolute harmony with my inside right now, even my poem is about someone’s presence gone … very nicely expressed emotions! Loved the word choice!

  28. gonecycling said:
    April 8, 2011 at 12:10

    I know exactly what that ‘absence as a presence’ feels like, and you’ve captured it so well. Another super poem.

  29. julie said:
    April 8, 2011 at 14:16

    extremely thoughtful words

  30. Jingle said:
    April 8, 2011 at 15:44

    ..please visit poets who are here, but you did not reach initially, thanks, we call it return favors, part of the rule,
    bless your Friday.

  31. lizbethsgarden said:
    April 8, 2011 at 23:05

    I enjoyed it — and it is so true, too. Our absent loved ones are as much with us in absence as presence.

  32. lunawitch15 said:
    April 9, 2011 at 02:59

    it is so beautiful and sad. waiting.
    the format pushs it home like a bullet.

  34. A.B. Thomas said:
    April 9, 2011 at 17:20

    This was an utterly delight to ingest!

  35. Dream Trekker said:
    April 9, 2011 at 18:13

    Like this one…I have felt many absences and this poem speaks to me. I can still feel that feeling inside.

  36. Samanthamj said:
    April 9, 2011 at 18:49

    wow.. I loved this.. so sad… but, beautifully expressed.

  37. Amity said:
    April 10, 2011 at 09:04

    Hmmm…this is really tough to think about…I am feeling the same way, especially when hubby leaves for many months of work away…the feeling is there especially when he had just left…but soon I would get accustomed to it till he will be back again…:)

    At least it is just temporary absence unlike in your poem!

    Great writing, I love it! 🙂

  38. Purvi said:
    April 10, 2011 at 12:49

    tremendous! Caught all.. said it well.. esp last stanza.

    I am from ~

    The Alliterated Symphonies of the mind ~

  39. Jesse S. Mitchell said:
    April 10, 2011 at 17:16

    I really like the idea of absence put forth here, very poetic.

  40. Meghna said:
    April 12, 2011 at 09:33

    Wow!!! luv the way you put “miss you” so effectively

  41. Dheepikaa said:
    April 12, 2011 at 12:24

    I absolutely love this poem. So many different thought ramifications happened in my head for every line. Quite impactful.

  42. -D said:
    April 13, 2011 at 12:41

    Sad. 😦

  43. bee said:
    April 14, 2011 at 01:01

    i absolutely loved this….
    very beautifully said

  44. pandamoniumcat said:
    April 16, 2011 at 00:11

    A very good poem, an absence can be strangely overpowering. You expressed it so well. One of the best!

  45. J.R. said:
    April 17, 2011 at 00:47

    I love the twist between showing the opposite of what is. It is very different and unique! Great Poem!
    J.R.

  46. lucychili said:
    April 28, 2011 at 07:23

    lovely inversion =)

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