I stood before a tempest sea once more,
she should be older then but seemed the same,
her waves rolled near my feet as times before
and loud she called me by my proper name.
She smiled at me when rays of sunlight shone,
her comfort whispers told me I should stay
in life to do what needed to be done,
she often told me I should go my way.
I could not join her, swim away and go
and leave all matters that I want to part
with every movement of the undertow
a way from shore into a wanted start.
Sea would not have my company that day,
withdrew in low tide and in silent grey.
Comments on: "Sea" (36)
Ooh wow. Your words make it feel like I’m there!
🙂 Hi redplace, thank you!
This is a really powerful poem.
Ideal use of the sonnet form
Arohanui
David
xxx
Thank you very much 🙂
Sometimes trying to do a more formal poem is a nice challenge!
Arohanui 🙂
Ina
xxx
Another evocative beauty…
Hi clinock, thank you! 🙂
Beautifully written, Ina. I can feel the waves surging in and out as I read it.
Hi William,
thank you very much! 🙂 I hope the waves were refreshing!
Perfectly well written, rhymed & metered sonnet to the sea…
Hi Lindy
thank you very much! 🙂
Life at times are like the waves that fade away. Nicely penned Ina.
Hi Walter, thank you! 🙂
Great Ina, very nicely done.
Hi David
thank you very much! 🙂
This speaks so of your intense relationship with the sea, Ina. The last lines are so excellent!
Hi Diane, thank you very much! 🙂
Very deeply moving–I love it.
Thank you Caddo! I am very pleased that you like it.
oh yes! perfect and powerful poem, Ina.
groetjes, Francina
Dank je Francina! Groetjes!
Wonderfully rhythmic sonnet.. great choice of subject for this form I think.
Hi Becky, thank you very much!
Lovely poem. Warms the heart. Lovely sonnet, which is Shakespearean, my favourite. Nothing else to say, but perfectly lovely. That breaks my rules of using a descriptive word more than once, but what the heck, I love this poem!
Thank you very much, I am glad you like it!
Beautiful sonnet! I sea it 🙂
Hi Mohana
thank you very much! 🙂
wow really nicely done….esp the end with the undertow but refusal of the tides…..the words dance….love it…
Hi Brian, thank you !
nice personification of the sea and how she speaks to us with her undertows and tides and waves…
Hi Claudia, thank you very much!
A perfect rendition of the Shakespearean form sonnet. Your rhythms as even as the sea, and the word choice and personification wrapped me completely. Excellent work!
Thank you very much! 🙂
In a, a very strong Shakesperean style sonnet. Beautifully written.
Hi monty, thank you!
Sweet, reminiscent, lonely and calm. Thank you
Thank you Sabio!