Sea

I stood before a tempest sea once more,
she should be older then but seemed the same,
her waves rolled near my feet as times before
and loud she called me by my proper name.

She smiled at me when rays of sunlight shone,
her comfort whispers told me I should stay
in life to do what needed to be done,
she often told me I should go my way.

I could not join her, swim away and go
and leave all matters that I want to part
with every movement of the undertow
a way from shore into a wanted start.

Sea would not have my company that day,
withdrew in low tide and in silent grey.

entry for dversepoets 14 sept. 2012

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Comments on: "Sea" (36)

  1. Ooh wow. Your words make it feel like I’m there!

  2. This is a really powerful poem.

    Ideal use of the sonnet form

    Arohanui
    David
    xxx

    • Thank you very much :)

      Sometimes trying to do a more formal poem is a nice challenge!

      Arohanui :)
      Ina
      xxx

  3. Another evocative beauty…

  4. Beautifully written, Ina. I can feel the waves surging in and out as I read it.

  5. Perfectly well written, rhymed & metered sonnet to the sea…

  6. Life at times are like the waves that fade away. Nicely penned Ina.

  7. Great Ina, very nicely done.

  8. This speaks so of your intense relationship with the sea, Ina. The last lines are so excellent!

  9. Caddo Veil said:

    Very deeply moving–I love it.

  10. Francina said:

    oh yes! perfect and powerful poem, Ina.

    groetjes, Francina

  11. Wonderfully rhythmic sonnet.. great choice of subject for this form I think.

  12. Lovely poem. Warms the heart. Lovely sonnet, which is Shakespearean, my favourite. Nothing else to say, but perfectly lovely. That breaks my rules of using a descriptive word more than once, but what the heck, I love this poem!

  13. Beautiful sonnet! I sea it :)

  14. wow really nicely done….esp the end with the undertow but refusal of the tides…..the words dance….love it…

  15. nice personification of the sea and how she speaks to us with her undertows and tides and waves…

  16. A perfect rendition of the Shakespearean form sonnet. Your rhythms as even as the sea, and the word choice and personification wrapped me completely. Excellent work!

  17. In a, a very strong Shakesperean style sonnet. Beautifully written.

  18. Sweet, reminiscent, lonely and calm. Thank you

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