Jumping at sunset

Me leaping abysses between your words
While nothing happens above surface, yet
We haven’t had the time to find regret.
Till we’ll both fall, we wait for when it hurts.

In vacuumed time let’s think of how we met:
Me, leaping abysses between your words,
you listened to the singing of the birds,
Time on our hands, the deep no threat.

While nothing happens above surface yet,
The cliff shall wait, the waves seem nervous herds
Of wolves claiming our past, they won’t forget
Me leaping abysses between your words.

We hear the surf sing in harmonic thirds
Stand, unprepared to watch the sun go set
While nothing happens above surface yet
The meanings of our love phrases – absurds.

We jump into conclusions as I let
Me leap the abysses between your words
While nothing happens above surface. Yet.

Comments on: "Jumping at sunset" (12)

  1. So powerful;. I believe deeply that for a person to write well they have must a very clear sense of what it is they are trying to convey. For them it must be “Real” and it is clear how deeply you know where you are, and how movingly you pick out those very details and thoughts which convey a sense of that place most clearly. As always, as I hope you know, you are both in my thoughts and very best wishes

    • Hi Peter, thank you very much! Your comments always make me think about what I wrote. Thank you also for your kind words! Best wishes to you too!

  2. Another beautiful and meaningful poem Ina. I have to reiterate what Peter has said above too. L&H ❤️ Xx

  3. A villanelle, I think? Tough to keep that weaving going, but you do it well. I especially like what you did to that last line, to keep it repeating but to vary its repetition.

  4. A beautiful poem Ina!

  5. Very beautiful poem, Ina❤

  6. Fine writing as always, Ina. The surface often belies what is underneath. Much love to you and Toussaint. Always thinking of you and holding you in my prayers. XO❤

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