Aware of Spring invading
the weight of life seems lighter.
Flowers do their persuading
to make us see things brighter.

We sense Summer pervading
in moist, trembling air around.
Ducks with youngsters parading,
the season means to astound.

In Autumn rains cascading
the truer self shows: despair
although we were evading.
In Fall we become aware.

( This poem is written in the Celtic poetry form of an Ae freslighe. πŸ™‚ )


Comments on: "Aware of tears (Ae freslighe)" (16)

  1. What a lovely poem πŸ™‚
    Beautiful flow of words πŸ™‚

  2. Lovely writing, Ina πŸ™‚

  3. Love this one! I must look up the form; Ive not come across it.

    We have rain cascading today unfortunately! L&H xx

    • Hi Christine, what a pity the weather is not better! We had sun today, now a bit cloudy. it was lovely outdoors! πŸ™‚ L&H xx

  4. It has a nice lilt to it. One thing I’m wondering about (not being too familiar with the form) is the fact that the first stanza’s rhyme construction is a(feminine)/b(fem)/a(fem)/b(fem), but the other two are a(fem)/c(masculine)/a(fem)/c(masc) and a(fem)/d(masc)/a(fem)/d(masc). Do the rules of the form actually specify that?

    • It didn’t say anything about that on the site where I learned about this πŸ™‚ I shall look into that! πŸ™‚

  5. A fine job, Ina! Do you use a rhyming dictionary? I ask only because these Celtic forms so often call for double and triple-syllable end-rhymes—a tough nut to crack..anyway, you cracked it !

    • Thank you Cynthia! I do look up words for rhyming; the meaning has to adjust to the poem though πŸ™‚

  6. David said:

    I find it difficult when I write to rhyme, because I sound so unnatural, but a form to play with is a good idea for prompting the flow. Nice job.

    • Thank you David. The essence of thoughts can be shaped so there can be rhyme I suppose. πŸ™‚ It matters what you want to say, and sometimes rhyming is not a good way to do that, so then the free verse is a better way. (I think) πŸ™‚ And I love to try out new things!

  7. A rhyming dictionary is a very good tool for a poet, and you’re right…we don’t let the form or the rhyme twist our thought out of shape….but no on can carry around in the head all the possibilities for language, so a small rhyming dictionary and a thesaurus are valuable friends, if used rightly πŸ™‚

  8. Lovely, Ina. The form is song-like. Very very nice XO β™₯

    • Thank you very much Diane! There are a lot of Celtic poetry forms, some of their forms are a real puzzle to understand but I like to try πŸ™‚ β™₯ xx

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