Be coming (Shadorma)

How to call?
You looked for a word
naming me,
just a word
describing your emotions
(but I’m no beauty)

you tasted this word,
before use,
their sound sweet sparkles in Spring,
then became my love.

You giggled
watched the curtains dance,
heavy scent,
we stayed in the sunlit bed,
good days of silence.

I just read about shadorma, a poetry form and giving it a try 🙂

Comments on: "Be coming (Shadorma)" (13)

  1. I like your spirit of always trying new things, Ina. It gives a sparkle to your poetry that seems endless. This particular effort builds a collage, and then leaves us in our imaginations.

  2. The Shadorma is said to be an urban myth, in that no one seems to be able to find provenance for it in Spanish literature. Maybe someone just made it up, as yet another exercise for poetry workshoppers. But after all, didn’t Shakespeare just “make up” the form of the Shakespearean sonnet? At any rate, I agree with Thomas–it’s good exercise to try different forms, and you’re good at it, Ina. When playing with words, interesting things can happen, and often do. You go, girl!

    • Hi Cynthia thank you very much, yes, playing with words and inmages in our mind, that is what I’m doing. 🙂

  3. Widow Beach said:

    What a yummy poem! And now you–and a couple other poets–have got me thinking I must shrug off my poetic laziness, dig out the “forms file” to get ready for April’s NaPoWriMo. I don’t think I’ve written a shadorma since last year’s poetry-fest.

    • Thank you WB 🙂 lol I don’t think you are lazy! I hope you will try one again 🙂

      • Widow Beach said:

        Yes, I shall get off my bum–renewed by spring’s energy–and open that forms file. Bless your heart for encouraging me, I needed that!

  4. This is wonderful Ina. I’m loving your work with rhymes and forms; really impressive and very beautiful. True poetry, from an amazingly talented writer. N.x

    • Hi Nick, thank you very much. I liked your Spenserian Sonnet very much and tried to do one this evening, not too sure though 🙂 x

  5. […] as my first attempt at this highly constrained form. To see how it should be done, I recommend this one! […]

  6. usually avoid poetic ‘forms’ – reminds me of university – but enjoyed this one – taking note to research…

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