In more or less a serious note
that you, my hasty lover, wrote,
you told me that your dreams were fine
since they were of how you’d be mine.
Now honestly, I’ve watched you sleep
so I can tell that you sleep deep,
I doubt you dream at all of me,
or more of what you had for tea;
you smack your lips and burb and grin
and lick the gravy from your chin,
you snore a lot and toss and turn
so much, it is a big concern.
You live in with your folks as well,
and all this in a sweaty smell,
no room is there for me for sure
and I don’t think I could endure
your mother sleeping in that bed
as well as we, when we are wed.
So sorry love, but we are done,
like all your dreams this one is gone.
I write this letter in reply
and end it with a firm goodbye!

😉

This is my first entry for NaPoWriMo.  

There is an optional prompt, (Carpe Diem poetry, I googled it up) and this is my sort of answer to that. I think my poem One day might be more Carpe Diem perhaps! Hope you will like, happy Sunday and seize the day!

NaPoWriMo is an American event, but I think I can take part as I do have an American publisher? 🙂

Comments on: "National Poetry Writing Month – a poem a day for 30 days – “The Note”" (25)

  1. Sounds like a great place to be. I can’t imagine you being disgruntled. smile..

  2. Angela said:

    Great poem, Ina! It made me smile as I read it 🙂

  3. Lovely Ina! A more whimsical air here, and the rhyme is different, too. 🙂

  4. This is wonderfully funny Ina! But my heart goes out to the poor rejected suitor – not to mention his dear old mother! 🙂

    • Hi John, thank you very much! 🙂 Well, you are just a very kind person with a kind heart then! 🙂 Did I mention the smell? 🙂

  5. Absolutely fabulous Ina!

    You are a star!!! :):)

    Love and hugs xx

  6. Hi Ina,

    Nice flow to your poem and a lovely place to be. Happy NaPoWriMo

  7. Hi Ina,

    Just wanted to let you know about The New Dark Globe Create A World Writing Contest… Here’s The Info on it http://thedarkglobe.wordpress.com/2012/03/31/let-the-games-begin-the-dark-globe-create-a-world-writing-contest-has-officiall-begun/

    In case you’d like to Enter, or Let Your People know about it

    Thanks Ina

    DarkJade-

    • Hi Dark Jade, I do hope to enter a story. My people (I feel as if I am in a tribe here lol) : go to the dark globe site! 🙂

  8. Oh this one was such fun to read AND empowering! Happy NaPoWriMo, Ina!

  9. High Energy And Big Fun…great way to start

    regards,

  10. Laughing Out Loud

    Terrific good fun

    Arohanui
    David
    xxx

  11. Francina said:

    oh yes, this is really good! love , love it. En een goed begin van een poem per dag!

    groetjes,
    Francina

  12. I’m grinning ear to ear…despite this reminding me of my marriage…well, especially the ‘your mother’ part…

    Ah, I sigh, so satisfyingly single now…

    Seriously, but not too seriously…I love this tongue-in-cheek style, Ina! A triumph, especially in your ‘firm goodbye’!

    • Hi Diane
      Satisfyingly single sounds super!
      I never knew my mothers in law 🙂 (Yes plural lol) but I am now one myself, I do hope I am doing that job alright!
      Thank you very much, I am so pleased with all your comments!

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