Nightmare

We were on top of the dune,
arms around each other,
watching our united shades
in the warm sand beneath,
when you suddenly let go

and I tumbled
and fell into thorny branches
aching my legs, face, arms;

falling
further away from love,
nothing to hold on to,
all ground disappeared.

Even when I landed,
there was nothing left
but the shade of the dune.

Comments on: "Nightmare" (13)

  1. Ah, a true story, Ina? I like this, and is the dune at the end symbolic somehow?

    • Hi David

      Thank you very much! The poem is a compilation of nightmares, I don’t know if the shade (of a no more existing dune) is symbolic… 🙂

  2. Falling into that shadow of an abandoned love. Hmm. I think I know the feeling. I like your direction in this poem. Again your poetry always resonates with me.

    • Hi Walter, thank you very much. The feeling that there is no ground under your feet anymore – aaah! 🙂

  3. “falling
    further away from love,
    nothing to hold on to,
    all ground disappeared.”

    Love this…

  4. I would be freaking out. It looks like to me the thorns represent the first pains of separation or the pain for all of it. Isn’t it wonderful we do wake up and realize it was dream after all.

  5. When I have nightmares there is usually a chase involved!!!

    But sometimes too there is falling – I don’t like heights!!!

    Arohanui
    David
    xxx

    • Hi David

      I know the chase dreams 🙂
      There actually is something nice about the falling dream, as you never ever hit the ground 🙂

      I too have a height scare, but I love cliffs. There is no logic there 🙂

      Arohanui 🙂
      xxx

  6. Bad nightmare, but a wonderful poem. I love your last lines – nothing left but the shade of the dune. Great poem, Ina, and my you have better dreams from now on!

  7. Such a contrast in the first few lines and the last. Very nice, Ina!

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