Like a lost bird in bitter cold snow,
this feeling I have is, and it won’t leave.
Like a song that is waiting
in melody fragments,
cannot explain why you needed to hurt me
when I mistook you for being kind.
Like a joke everyone understands but not me.
Like a word that won’t come, or a line that has gone
from the back of my mind.
Like a final false note ending it sadly,
over I mean, it is over and done.

trying out metaphors. 🙂

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Comments on: "Metaphorically speaking it’s over" (9)

  1. What a poignant little poem! You are speaking of a universal experience here of course, and there are some very accurate images – such as “like a joke everyone understands but not me”.
    Trying out metaphors? More than that I’d say! They are spot on!

    • Hi John, thank you very much, glad they worked 🙂 I always tried to say just what I mean, but when I take good look, I already did use metaphors more than I was aware of! 🙂

      • Just learned the difference between metaphor and simile. Maybe the title should be “similecally speaking” or something like that 🙂

  2. A lovely bittersweet poem.

    It would seem you do understand metaphors after all 🙂

    Love and hugs

    David

    • Thank you. If this is it, I think they are dead easy 😛 just kidding. But it is a bit different when a complete poem is actually a metaphor. I suppose the reader has to be on guard.

      Love and hugs!

  3. Metaphors choose you rather than the other way around…I’m convinced of that…

  4. I really like your witty title! And ‘Like a song that is waiting’ and ‘Like a final false note’ are lovely.

    • 🙂 Thank you BH. Simile’s can be very nice, but also very ugly I think. But it is a style form that is much used, part of poetry, so I better try it out 🙂

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