The air was filled with grieve

The air was filled with grieve,
no matter how I aired the room,
it wouldnโ€™t leave.
It lived with me, it shared my bed,
it was in every word I said.
Light seemed to matter more to me
than it ever did before,
I searched for it even at night.
The grieve was in the colours
that became more grey,
if they were bright.
I drunk my grieving tea
and tasted apples that were sour.
The weight of grieve was felt
throughout the hour, every day,
never leaving me alone.
But Autumn came.
The trees lost all their leaves,
the light was silver, there were storms.
No day too soon came my relieve.
An end came to my hurt,
grieve left October third,
at half past noon.

entry for poetry picnic week 7 love and loss

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Comments on: "The air was filled with grieve" (32)

  1. I love the way you have used the word ‘grieve’ in this poem.

    I would not have thought of using it like that but it works extremele well.

    Really well done

    Hugs

    David

    • Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚ I was not sure about making it rhyme, but it sort of went automatically like that lol. ๐Ÿ™‚ Glad you like it.
      Hugs
      Ina

  2. I enjoyed this entry of love and grieving…I hope autumn will give you the reprieve you need…

    an edit suggestion: No day *too* soon…

    neat ending ~

  3. Hi Heaven, thank you for your comment, I fixed the ” too “:) thanks! This grieving was real a while ago, but like it said in the poem, it left! ๐Ÿ™‚

  4. The ending caught me out, I thought it would be one of those poems where the grieving never ends. Very effective.

  5. this poem moved me becos i can relate to the grieve how it stays with you, but we sud at the end make peace with whats not there anymore…

    • Hi chinese, grieve is such a deep emotion, it needs to end at one point I suppose, although no one knows when it does. Thank you very much for your comment.

  6. It is a known fact that grieving takes time. Often, it can take up to five years depending upon the surrounding circumstances. I still grieve the loss of my close companion to cancer. I like your poem very much. xoXox

  7. Hi Kay thank you very much. I just found out today that my friend and my motrher died on the same date, but 11 years apart, I had never realized that. The pain is gone, but the miss still there.

  8. This is another outstanding write, Ina! The last line is stunning in its simple truth and finality! Very well done!
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/02/two-yearning-heart/

  9. Hi Charles, thank you very much! I shall check out your poem.

  10. Dear Ina

    Its heartfelt thought and I could relate to it a lot… your lines were powerful…

    ‘Light seemed to matter more to me
    than it ever did before,
    I searched for it even at night.’

    I could see that happening with me…

    Thanks for sharing at Poetry Picnic WK 7โ€ฆ I look forward to reading more from you in our next week theme โ€œFriends, relationships and everyone aroundโ€โ€ฆ

    Shashi
    เฅ เคจเคฎเคƒ เคถเคฟเคตเคพเคฏ
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/10/whispers-love-and-loss-butterfly.html

    • Hi Shashi, thank you very much for your nice comment! I hope I can enter something next week! ๐Ÿ™‚

  11. sad, powerful.

    true, he may be gone, but the memories haunt like air, it follows you everywhere.
    ๐Ÿ™‚

  12. the light was silver, there were storms.
    No day too soon came my relieve.
    An end came to my hurt,
    grieve left October third,
    at half past noon.

    sad, well said.

  13. I am so glad that the grief ended in October half past noon. This is a very sad and compelling poem with a happy ending when your grief left you on this date.’
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/03/memories-and-photographs-of-you/

  14. To go through the complete cycle of grief takes time, but it is necessary for true healing to begin. Everyone’s time of grief is different … my time of completion is finally getting closer, and I look forward to it. Poignant write … thoughts of you for tomorrow!

  15. Well done I enjoyed reading this piece ๐Ÿ™‚

  16. I agree, sometimes we can be that precise… Poetically speaking, one of the best I read from you.

  17. enjoyed this ina.. tq for coming by– was a bit busy lol haha!

  18. How is your day?

    Time flies, appreciated your handsome inputs to our poetry picnic.

    Share a poem today.
    Bless you.
    Happy December,
    Enjoy A Wonderful Wednesday Ahead.

    xoxox

    • Hi, stormy day here. I am still trying to do the rally lol, I don’t think I can make this picnic!
      Happy December to you too! ๐Ÿ™‚

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