So now you notice me
in wallpaper shadows,
in the cups in the sink
and the laundry in the dryer.
Tomorrow, I think,
my shadow will be gone,
the dishes done.
I will leave my laundry though,
so you will have items
to remember me by
and how it was in bed.
And besides,
it is not all completely dry
just yet.
David M Pitchford used some of this poem in his beautiful Souvenirs of you – click here
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Comments on: "Souvenir" (13)
This left me with a smile Ina.
I love the way some of your poems have that little twist sat the end.
I am glad of that smile. I have been to the doctor this morning again about my thumb/wrist. Then I went to the hospital for an xray (report to be sent to doc). Also I am being referred to a specialist. Progress at last!
Love and hugs xx
Hi Christine, thank you, glad I could make you smile. I am sorry to hear that you had to visit those doctors, what a hustle, I hope they will be able to do something about it quickly!
Love and a big hug!
lovely.
I borrowed from this, thieved a fair share. hope you like what I did with it. I’ll post as “Souvenirs of You”.
David
🙂 Well I am honoured you found something to use 🙂 Thank you, I am looking forward to reading that poem!
I love what you did with it! It is a really great poem! 🙂
thanks so much. I often think of poems as either conversations or bits of conversation, and so it seems only natural to butt into very interesting or poignant conversations here and there.
David
🙂 Yes, I know, maybe you should read BelfastDavid’s poem “No I don’t understand it either” 🙂 http://belfastdavid.wordpress.com/2011/09/27/no-i-dont-understand-it-either/ which is about that subject 🙂
Stunning poem, especially the first verse
Thank you very much! 🙂
Made me smile too.
A good start to a Saturday morning 🙂
We are still in the midst of an Indian summer over here – hotter that it was during most of the summer.
Love
David
Hi David,
thanks for the smile!
It is very warm here too, and better than Summer was.
Love
Ina
I love this poem, Ina. I especially like the contrast between the mysterious wallpaper shadows and the very mundane cups. And I like the possibly ambiguous ending – a suggestion that things are maybe not quite over yet? Or there’s still infinished business.
David’s riff on it is really interesting too!
Thank you very much for this great comment, I am glad you like it. 🙂 Yes, I love the way David riffed 🙂