Those memories of evenings with a friend
need nothing that the memory would spoil,
no sign that this warm friendship was to end,
not while we both did burn the midnight oil.
.
There was just laughter as I loved your wit
And you liked mine, the jesting puns intended
with flick’ring lights as candles all were lit,
the full round moon just made it splendid.
.
Then you no more returned after that Summer
though not a quarrel was the guilty part
A heart attack, that really was the bummer
apparently you had a weakened heart
.
Mem’ries don’t want tears to spoil their grace
Now you just faded to a different phase
.
in remembrance of my dear friend Corrie , who died 23 years ago
This poem had a former edition, that didn’t have the right flow/rhythm. To rewrite this poem, I had great help and advice from BelfastDavid (David Agnew) , for which I thank him very much 🙂 !
I am not sure this would be a Shakespearean Sonnet now. Maybe it is a Sonnet? 🙂
Ina 
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This is certainly a sonnet and a good one at that.
It is also a terrific tribute to your friend.
Sorry I haven’t been around this afternoon – I was watching cricket on the TV.
You have done a really good job with this. well done
With love
David
I had to use ‘ here and there to make it more iambic. Still no Shakespearean huh?
I will keep trying to get the hang of it!
Cricket 🙂 I never understood the rules. I heard a game can go on for days! Hope you did enjoy!
Thank you for the compliment 🙂 and your help!
With love
Ina
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It does go on for days – Today was the fourth day of five!!
David
In the rain…
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Absolutely wonderful. Love every line. Keep up the good work.
I wish this had a “Like” button… or better yet, a “Love” button. 🙂
Thank you very much Joel 🙂 A love button? 🙂 There is a thought!
it sounds like a remarkable summer night to you.
Cheers.
😉
Such a beautiful tribute. Why must the ones we love perish? Thank you for sharing this.
Remembering our lost friends is the best way to honor their friendship. My condolences.
Touching tribute and lovely rhyme and composition piece. Much enjoyed ~ Rose
Very understandable , simple and elegant…thanks for sharing. Have a lovely Thusday! .Keep up the fantastic work! Visit me too. Greetings!
Sorry to hear about the loss in the Sonnet. Beautifully written and conveyed.
a beautiful sonnet it is in deed…..i like the flow and the words easily flow of the tongue if u read it very slow…..great job..
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This is beautiful and captures true friendship perfectly. Thank you x
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This is beautiful, it’s true that we shouldn’t cry when someone’s gone but should rejoice in the memories and wonders of their lives
Wow thank you all very much for your comments (and condolences) ! 🙂 I really apreciate every comment!
@Jingle, ty;
@Aaron, thank you;
@Eric, ty;
@C Rose, ty;
@Nelson, ty;
@Jaan, ty;
@Chimnese, ty;
@Rebecca, ty;
@ Ashbeezone , Kind Lazy People Shit? lol well Summer is for being lazy? ty!
and @Kate, ty!
I am so glad you all read, enjoyed and commented!
Happy rally and good luck with your writing all!
Nice way to remember a departed friend.
Hi Jacqui, thank you.
It is hard to lose friends. You’ve honored Corrie quite nicely with this lovely poem.
Thank you very much, Charles.
I have to agree with Charles. Nice write.
Hi Booguloo 🙂 Thank you very much!
nice poem, I applaud your ability to write so well in a standard form like a sonnet. you captured the sadness of losing your friend. thanks for sharing
Thank you Derek. I had help 🙂
Sentimental and beautiful. Great work!
Thank you 🙂
I could feel the emotions.. Were you and she roommates, Ina?
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Hi Leo. No, we were just friends 🙂
Yes–a real sonnet–thank you.
🙂 Thank you Miriam.
Very beautiful Ina.Great flow 🙂
Hi there, thank you!
Definitely the form and the sentiment are there for your Shakespearean sonnet. A poignant remembrance of your friend, conveying the sense of how sad and difficult the loss is for you, while the memories remain so precious.
Thank you very much Elaine! It was a real shock then, and I still remember her with much love.
What a very meaningful narration of the last time you were with your friend. Very sweet poem. Job well done! 🙂
Thank you Irene! 🙂
This is a beautiful and touching sonnet. I have wanted to try this form but find it challenging and haven’t succeeded yet you have done a wonderful job. It’s a wonderful tribute. I am so sorry for your loss
Thank you very much! I am trying out different forms. Somehow they all have something to teach me 🙂
I’m sorry for your friend! Great tribute! Thanks for sharing, always a pleasure to visit you Ina!
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Hi, thank you very much 🙂 Loved your entry!
Loved this – a poignant memory, forever held and enhanced by your words
Thank you very much 🙂
This was beautiful! As one guilty of applying it to my own, the apostrophe usage was sublime and utterly effective in capturing my attention!
🙂 Well it was needed for the iambic rhythm 🙂 Thank you 🙂
Beautiful tribute / ode to your friend!
Thank you Peggy!
very nice the last line is great
Thank you so much swanrose!