A Sonnet

Those memories of evenings with a friend

need nothing that the memory would spoil,

no  sign that this warm friendship was to end,

not  while we both  did burn the midnight oil.


There was just laughter as I loved your wit

And you liked mine, the jesting puns  intended

with flick’ring lights as  candles all were lit,

the full round moon  just made it splendid.


Then  you no more returned  after that Summer

though  not a quarrel was the guilty part

A heart attack, that really was the bummer

apparently you had a weakened heart


Mem’ries don’t want tears to spoil their grace

Now  you  just faded to a different phase


in remembrance of my dear friend Corrie , who died 23 years ago

This poem had a former edition, that didn’t have the right flow/rhythm. To rewrite this poem, I had great help and advice from  BelfastDavid (David Agnew) , for which I thank him very much  🙂 !

I am not sure this would be a Shakespearean Sonnet now.  Maybe it is a Sonnet? 🙂

entry for thursdays rally


Comments on: "A Sonnet" (50)

  1. belfastdavid said:

    Big 🙂

    This is certainly a sonnet and a good one at that.

    It is also a terrific tribute to your friend.

    Sorry I haven’t been around this afternoon – I was watching cricket on the TV.

    You have done a really good job with this. well done

    With love

    • I had to use ‘ here and there to make it more iambic. Still no Shakespearean huh?
      I will keep trying to get the hang of it!

      Cricket 🙂 I never understood the rules. I heard a game can go on for days! Hope you did enjoy!

      Thank you for the compliment 🙂 and your help!

      With love

  2. Absolutely wonderful. Love every line. Keep up the good work.

  3. I wish this had a “Like” button… or better yet, a “Love” button. 🙂

  4. it sounds like a remarkable summer night to you.


  5. Such a beautiful tribute. Why must the ones we love perish? Thank you for sharing this.

  6. Remembering our lost friends is the best way to honor their friendship. My condolences.

  7. Touching tribute and lovely rhyme and composition piece. Much enjoyed ~ Rose

  8. Very understandable , simple and elegant…thanks for sharing. Have a lovely Thusday! .Keep up the fantastic work! Visit me too. Greetings!

  9. Jaan Pehchaan said:

    Sorry to hear about the loss in the Sonnet. Beautifully written and conveyed.

  10. a beautiful sonnet it is in deed…..i like the flow and the words easily flow of the tongue if u read it very slow…..great job..

    my link: http://mypoetrywriting.blogspot.com/2011/07/tears-in-rain.html

  11. This is beautiful and captures true friendship perfectly. Thank you x

  12. Well … That was nice
    Totally amazing
    Kind Lazy People Shit .. but it’s GREAT …
    BTW, Take a look on my Work ..
    and my very recent stuff …

    Happy Rally !!!

  13. This is beautiful, it’s true that we shouldn’t cry when someone’s gone but should rejoice in the memories and wonders of their lives

  14. Wow thank you all very much for your comments (and condolences) ! 🙂 I really apreciate every comment!

    @Jingle, ty;
    @Aaron, thank you;
    @Eric, ty;
    @C Rose, ty;
    @Nelson, ty;
    @Jaan, ty;
    @Chimnese, ty;
    @Rebecca, ty;
    @ Ashbeezone , Kind Lazy People Shit? lol well Summer is for being lazy? ty!
    and @Kate, ty!

    I am so glad you all read, enjoyed and commented!
    Happy rally and good luck with your writing all!

  15. Nice way to remember a departed friend.

  16. It is hard to lose friends. You’ve honored Corrie quite nicely with this lovely poem.

  17. I have to agree with Charles. Nice write.

  18. nice poem, I applaud your ability to write so well in a standard form like a sonnet. you captured the sadness of losing your friend. thanks for sharing

  19. Sentimental and beautiful. Great work!

  20. I could feel the emotions.. Were you and she roommates, Ina?

    My Poem ~ Vicissitude of thought

  21. Hi Leo. No, we were just friends 🙂

  22. Yes–a real sonnet–thank you.

  23. J Sirrah said:

    Very beautiful Ina.Great flow 🙂

  24. Definitely the form and the sentiment are there for your Shakespearean sonnet. A poignant remembrance of your friend, conveying the sense of how sad and difficult the loss is for you, while the memories remain so precious.

    • Thank you very much Elaine! It was a real shock then, and I still remember her with much love.

  25. Irene Cortez said:

    What a very meaningful narration of the last time you were with your friend. Very sweet poem. Job well done! 🙂

  26. This is a beautiful and touching sonnet. I have wanted to try this form but find it challenging and haven’t succeeded yet you have done a wonderful job. It’s a wonderful tribute. I am so sorry for your loss

    • Thank you very much! I am trying out different forms. Somehow they all have something to teach me 🙂

  27. I’m sorry for your friend! Great tribute! Thanks for sharing, always a pleasure to visit you Ina!

    Here is my Rally http://brokensparkles.wordpress.com/2011/07/31/musings/

  28. Loved this – a poignant memory, forever held and enhanced by your words

  29. A.B. Thomas said:

    This was beautiful! As one guilty of applying it to my own, the apostrophe usage was sublime and utterly effective in capturing my attention!

  30. Beautiful tribute / ode to your friend!

  31. very nice the last line is great

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