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The paint is dry, but is it you
who looks away, ( we see one eye)
it could have been me too?
Is it a tear, a laugh a cry?
*
Is it you, this picture, when
it is not me, are we both here
is it a hollow image then
just canvas with a bit of smear?
*
Why has the painter left his work
unfinished on the floor
and is that smile there just a smirk
as he walks out the door?
*
The canvas will just rot and mold
rats will come, the fabric torn apart
We can´t be painted, so I am told.
Just tears can paint an akin heart
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entry for jingle potluck starting Monday 23 May 2011 theme: images, pictures an paintings
Comments on: "is it you and me?" (33)
Sad and complative piece; you have captured the longing and regret nicely.
Hi Christine, thank you very much!
Wow, what a beautiful poem, thank you for sharing 🙂
I do believe more than a tear can paint a canvass, although sometimes I do feel that way.
Hi TTC, thank you very much!
A painfully beautiful portrait, Ina!
Thank you very much! 🙂
What a very, very sad poem.
Beautifully captured pain
David
Somehow sadness and poems go well together. No idea why. I would love to write a happy one lol. Thank you very much! 🙂
heartbreaking i love this poem..sad…
Hi Chimnese, thanks for loving it. 🙂
Beautiful and sad, a great write!
🙂 Thank you!
arts or painting are simply lonely subjects,
they are admired when people come to visit and appreciate them.
beautiful perception of deserted paintings.
thanks for sharing.
🙂
Thanks Jingle!
this is so well expressed! i love it….thanks Ina 🙂
Thank you! 🙂
Loved your poem Ina…it truly touches the heart.
Thank you so much David! 🙂
You have beautifully captured the pain of abandoned, rotting canvases.
Hallo mystic margarita, thank you!
beautiful and romantic. love, love, love! 🙂 xx
🙂 Thanks!
I just want to sing your song the rest of my life.
Wow MO, 🙂 thanks!
Beautiful, fills my brain with loads of images!
Thanks CC 🙂
Thoughful and authentic. The sadness of regret wafts through in a wave of emotion. Nicely done, Ina. Congratulation.
Ah, yes! I missed that this was your Rally piece. Right on them.
Well, I will visit a while longer and enjoy some of the poems I’ve missed.
Poem on … Happy Weekend!
Hi Jamie, thank you very much!
well conveyed passion and sentiments.
the creativity in you is infinite.
Greetings:
How are you?
Check out our short story slam today,
We love creativity, your contribution is invaulable to us.
Cheers.
Happy Saturday.
xoxox
Hi I am fine, thank you for your comment. I have tried to write a story for the slam ( “Abe”) and made it an entry. Now I am trying to find the rules for the rally.
This gives that “storminess” such a romantic quality. I agree with others it is very beautifully done.
Thank you Old-Raven 🙂