~{}~

when words have lost their meaning

 remaining shells with nothing more

 their letters with no goal,  just tired, pale and leaning

against the doorpost like some old forgotten whore

then poetry is dead and gone

and language lost its purpose all together

nothing to revive it can be done

no words are saved, no single useful letter

no meaning to the sentences  is real

if you don’t read my words, the ones I’ve written

you never know just how I bleed and feel

could language only be a messenger of love

sent with the wings of some eternal dove

 ~{}~

entry for jingle thursday poets rally 43
http://promisingpoetscafe.wordpress.com/2011/05/07/164/award

My acceptance poem :

so many words are written fast
so many said, not all are heard
but there may be a few that last
like ‘love’ as the most perfect word

I nominate Jamie Dedes!

Comments on: "When words have lost their meaning" (85)

  1. belfastdavid said:

    This is wonderful,

    I love the rhythm and the flow and the bitter-sweet feeling created by the final couplet.

    A sonnet, I often feel, is the ideal form for a love poem.

    Terrific

    • Thank you very much 🙂 I thought I might have overlooked the number of syllabels, not sure they are free in number.

      • belfastdavid said:

        Well, to be a true sonnet you need an extra line in the third stanza. But I could tell you were aiming for a sonnet even without that line.

        And anyway it is a terrific poem 🙂

        David

  2. Excellent post! I enjoyed reading it very much.

    Poetry will never loose it’s touch even as we enter this digital age. Thanks for sharing.

    A Poem for Mothers

  3. Poems like these make me smile (occasionally I write a poem along these lines, too) because I wouldn’t know what to do without language and/or poetry, and by writing about/against it, it’s like we’re fighting to retain it’s meaning. And that’s what I love about these poems.

    • Glad to make you smile then. It is nice to do these poems, and if people take the effort to read it, and comment, it is even more rewarding. 🙂 So thank you,.

  4. What an authentic piece. Nicely written and most especially appreciate the last stanza. Thank, Ina!

  5. Love and dove are rhymes for centuries which being a part of the last two lines showed how the poem clearly implies a little stumble in writing indicating the importance of lack of words. What a comparison there: against the doorpost like some old forgotten whore! Wow.

    How indeed the words were taking their bleeding in letters so beautifully.

    • Hi Dheepikaa. I liked the idea of a dove before realizing the rhyme with love. 🙂 Thanks for your comment!

  6. “A word is dead
    when it is said,
    some say.

    I say it just
    Begins to live
    That day.”

    – Emily Dickinson

  7. Iris D said:

    leaning on the doorpost like some old forgotten whore. Wow that is imagery!!!
    Interesting and dynamic poem.

    Iris

  8. its beautifully written, not just the style but the thought too 🙂

  9. I agree with all the comments above – what I really enjoyed was the cadence of this poem.

  10. Liked the imagery conjoured up in this one.
    Long live poetry!

  11. love the title,

    beautiful delivery of your emotions/views.
    smiles.

    🙂

  12. beautiful Ina… what a sad thing though when words wrote with our own feelings just wither away or not be noticed.

  13. Julian Javier the Cyber Mushroom said:

    this is wonderful! words never lose the emotion as it is a way of immortalizing the emotions felt during the time the words were written. lovely poem!

  14. Thoughtful poem, Ina! And then lines 11 and 12 are like a punch to the average reader…

  15. its true what u wrote, if only our words could be like a message, which it is…sometimes pppl take difrent meanings from a written word.

  16. The flow is smooth and yes you have written abouts words …they have the power to transform either to good or bad

  17. birchtreepastor said:

    Great poem and great thoughts on the importance of language. Thank you for sharing!

  18. your words expressed so much 🙂

  19. This is really beautiful and true. 🙂

    Please do check out mine: http://dcec.wordpress.com/2011/05/05/thursday-rally-week-43/

  20. As long as you write pieces like this, words will never lose their meaning. Thank you.

  21. The world of words! The tools of a poet and you captured it so beautifully.

  22. I suspect that you value words as I do. And so, I AM careful not to wast them. Use only those that are necessary. They are precious.

  23. Words beyond words. Thank you

  24. good rythm, great content

  25. well done!
    when words have lost their meaning..
    is it love?
    🙂

  26. ver well crafted

  27. Absolutely true! I wish more people would use language as a messenger for love, alas sometimes there are other purposes … Very creative Ina, liked it a lot!

  28. That’s a intense one!
    Very realistic though.. very well composed.. 🙂

    Hugs ox

  29. I once heard someone joke that, “Every new group of writers thinks the world is ending with their art.” This poem reminded me of that in a way. Good job!

  30. What could I say…… BEAUTIFUL POEM, Ina.

  31. A.B. Thomas said:

    What a great and sharp write!

  32. very nice and it portrays what could be said of all poets. good job

    my thursday post was here

    http://blackswanpoetry.wordpress.com/2011/05/05/poem-can%e2%80%99t-believe-it%e2%80%99s-you/

  33. well done award nomination and so on.
    😉

  34. Congratulations, Ina! 🙂 That award was deserved! Lovely verse to accept it too. Both the verse and the first poem are beautiful..!

  35. Thank you for putting me on the list for the Summer award! 🙂

  36. Beautiful, absolutely beautiful =)

  37. You are simply stupendous in expression!

  38. A horrible fate. Thank you for sharing. Good poem.

  39. Thanks! 🙂

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