~{}~

 

So quiet are you now,

and words have all been said.

We should have gone to bed,

but we don’t know just how.

 

Much talk there was, when we just met –

So quiet are you now,

as if we had  a row.

 

The books have all been read;

We should have gone to bed

(remembering my vow ).

Not cold, but silence do I dread

 

“So, quiet are you now?”

“My mind is numb, so that is how.”

“Was it something then I said?”

We should have gone to bed…

 

You smile and kiss me on the head:

“So well I know you,  long as we’ve been wed!

So quiet are you now.

We should have gone to bed!”

😉

 

~{}~

Comments on: "A Villanelle too: “Marriage”" (8)

  1. I love this – it’s tender, melancholy, slightly brittle and full of undercurrents, but shot through with warmth and humour. Just like marriage itself, in fact. Very cleverly done, Ina.

  2. belfastdavid said:

    The real art in using form for poems I think is that the reader should be unaware of the form as they are reading the poem.

    This one works in that way – It is such a bitter-sweet moving poem that if you had not told me it was a villanelle I may well have not noticed.

    Really well done

    David

    • David, thank you very much 🙂 Maybe the form should be less important than the contence. It should have a natural flow somehow. (still learning )

  3. Wonderful poem here Ina

  4. belfastdavid said:

    For me personally content is always more important than form.

    I want poetry to speak to me, to touch me, to move me in some way.
    Emily Dickinson said “If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry”

    I cannot expect that from all poems, but for a poem to work for me it has to connect to me emotionally in some way.

    I am not impressed by poems which are just clever or arty-farty for their own sake 🙂

    Having said that I do believe that form is sometimes important – The Shakespearian sonnet seems to me ideal for love poems 🙂

    David

    • Hi David, content and rhytm is most important I think, more so than rhyme or form, and there should be an original thought. Free verse is a lot easier anyway! Thanks for this comment, I value your wisdom 🙂 Have a cup of tea on me!

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