The road ahead

 

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You shook my hand, a hastely  embrace and then ‘t was real

You went away  from me to think how  you would feel

My cruel enemy became the scenic road ahead

With every step you took from me,  I felt a bit more dead

 

A shiver in the woodlands, a breeze of winter air

I looked, the road ahead of me was empty and still there

But you were gone,  you were already out of sight

The shortest day  turned sneaky into the longest night

 

The road that lay ahead had now become your past

You had your precious freedom given then at last

I did hate that road for months and every mile it’s long

Till the day that you came back to me and where you do belong

 

The road ahead can’t  always be a highway

The years we lived our lifes  in drama are now gone

I hope the road will just be long and peacefull

And that I’ll have you all the time along

 

We might at times be challenged by  a sidetrack

Detours,  some sad old bridges to be crossed

But everytime we shall  find the road  back

On  this  journey none of us gets lost.

 

The path will climb and lead us up the mountain

So we can see what lays ahead of us

We won’t  as much look  back over our shoulders

To places were we came from,  or to the past that was.

 

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This one is an entry for Jingles Potluck  (And I stuck with the theme!)

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Comments on: "The road ahead" (43)

  1. Great! Very deep!
    Enjoy:

  2. Thank you miss 🙂 Good energetic song!

  3. I always like the idea of the road being a metaphor for our lives. You take us on a very personal journey here, Ina.

    http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2011/01/07/my-best-friend/

    • Thank you very much Jessica, the first part was not about me personally but more fiction-like, but the second part is from real life 🙂

  4. You took us through the road of life very wisely.

  5. A shiver in the woodlands, a breeze of winter air

    I looked, the road ahead of me was empty and still there

    But you were gone, you were already out of sight

    The shortest day turned sneaky into the longest night..

    loved every line here, very well constructed piece, perfect rhymes as well…
    you have beautiful imaginations.

    A++

  6. wonderful lines, thanks for sharing this.

  7. Lovely, the message you put across is so profound. The road may be bitter at times, but we’ll always find our way back onto it, on this journey of life 🙂 Enjoyed reading this immensely

  8. A marvelous poem…thank you for sharing.

  9. Oh yes, you stuck to the theme, alright!! And beautifully too!!
    Gosh.. I really loved the twists and turns in your poem.. and coming back together was simply superb! I hope this journey stays enjoyable for a looooong time to come…

  10. belfastdavid said:

    It feels to me that there are two poems here.

    The first three verses are one poem. The last three verses are another poem.

    I have a preference for the second of the two poems 🙂

    David

    • You are very right David, the second half was the original poem, but it looked a bit boring, so I added the first half. Thanks 🙂

  11. I like this one.
    Impressive to keep it so consistent throughout such a long poem.
    My hats off to you

  12. have fun!
    Glad you share again…
    🙂

  13. wow.. thats a lovely poem there…

    here from Jingle’s Rally.. You can find my poem at
    http://megzone.wordpress.com/2011/01/12/i-dance/

  14. Gr8 Thought …
    Take a look on my work
    A Poetry for the Nation ..
    http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/2010/10/24/blood-and-sweat-form-patriotism/
    !! Happy rally !!

  15. Thanks Jingle, megzone and Ashbeezone, happy rally to you too!

  16. Well done. A nice illustration of the journey. Good contribution to Potluck.

    By the way, you don’t have to use the them, you can contribute a poem on any subject. The theme is more or less a suggestion. 🙂

  17. A journey that travels through pain and back to happiness. I enjoyed traveling with you. Thanks for sharing.

  18. “The road that lay ahead had now become your past”
    Like that line Ina, very good poem

  19. Hi Dan and words4afriend, thanks to you both! 🙂

  20. Very lovely. Pulled me down another path.

    Shalom.

  21. You invite the reader to experience all the emotions of relationship ups and downs…a bit of sadness and regret, then hope.

  22. Beautiful! So emotional and real… Thanks for sharing 🙂

  23. Hi magher1, thank you very much! 🙂

  24. Happy Tuesday, return favor to those poets who are here yet you did not reach them initially…
    I am saying these to all poets, hope that you take it rationally…
    thanks for the support.

  25. hmmmm.. beautiful one..
    Could relate to it very well.. It so happens that we climb the mountains (obtacle) and then smile upon our victory keeping aside how we had to find our way up.. Precisely what I am writing about in my Main Blog.. 🙂
    Smiles n loads of Luck
    Love xxx

  26. well expressed, Ina…can relate to many parts of it…glad though that you ended it on a positive note and thought, which often elude us in real life 🙂

  27. Thanks Amrita! 🙂

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