Heaven for life

~{}~

 

the night that we spent in the white

squeeking bed

the  matrass too thin and the pillow

leaking hundreds of  feathers

that night turned into morning

 

when there was light

you opened the window

 

as Montmartre awoke

entering the small room

sounds of cars  and  curses in French

 

someone in room number seven

was laughing out loud

as the feathers went snowing

down into the wet street

from our heavenly cloud

 

you stepped back in bed

in your eyes, there it was

in your whisper it went

in your arms it remained

in the feathers flying around us

we found it again

and again

deeper

in lust

 

the sunlight that shone on your skin

was our heaven

like the darkness  had been  our heaven that night

and your moves were the waves

and the tide of our ocean

the sea in our paradise

was salted with love

 

the time that we spent in the white

squeeking bed

in Montmartre

Rue Briquet

room number five

was our time in heaven for life

 

~{}~

 

entry for Jingle’s Thursday rally

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/poetry/

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Comments on: "Heaven for life" (29)

  1. Great poem, Ina! Wow! I can a theme developing. This is for you:

  2. Thanks 🙂 Nice song!

  3. you stepped back in bed

    in your eyes, there it was

    in your whisper it went

    in your arms it remained

    in the feathers flying around us

    we found it again

    and again

    deeper

    in lust…

    elegant imagery, your words are gentle and magical…

    I linked in to old rally or week 36 rally, please comment for about 12 poets to get your work more feedback…will add this piece to the collection I posted yesterday…

  4. belfastdavid said:

    This is delicious.

    I am smiling too at the feathers “Snowing down into the wet street” 🙂

    I was out in the wet streets of Leeds this morning – no feathers!!

    David

    • lol Really, no feathers ? Then in Leeds they probably have synthetic pillow stuffings? 🙂 Or they are a bit more carefull with hotel equipment 🙂

  5. irenethebean said:

    Nicely done.
    irenethebean.wordpress.com

  6. beautiful poem 😀

  7. Heavenly! its just so awesome.. so delicate.. like a song 🙂

    ~ http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2010/12/29/sunshine-on-my-shoulder/

  8. Nice one 🙂

    really passionate

  9. Thanks hindawy!

  10. Hot. Tickled.

  11. enjoyed reading this very much!
    thank you

  12. This is an awesome poem.
    Some great images in these words.

  13. congrats on the award

  14. Hi Artswebshow thanks 🙂
    dancingfreak, also thank you very much! I am very proud to get so many votes 🙂

  15. a great award for a great poet…
    smile all the way.
    🙂

  16. Thanks Jingle!

  17. I see why you were one of the winners. That was beautiful!

  18. Thank you very much Lisa! 🙂

  19. i like this ina! thank you for sharing. congrats on your perfect poet award wk 36 and the celebrated poet award.. here’s mine for this thursday.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/02/19/the-tears/

  20. I like this. I appreciate the way you made the setting seem real. Good.

    Congrats’ on your Award! Happy days …

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