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the night that we spent in the white
squeeking bed
the matrass too thin and the pillow
leaking hundreds of feathers
that night turned into morning
when there was light
you opened the window
as Montmartre awoke
entering the small room
sounds of cars and curses in French
someone in room number seven
was laughing out loud
as the feathers went snowing
down into the wet street
from our heavenly cloud
you stepped back in bed
in your eyes, there it was
in your whisper it went
in your arms it remained
in the feathers flying around us
we found it again
and again
deeper
in lust
the sunlight that shone on your skin
was our heaven
like the darkness had been our heaven that night
and your moves were the waves
and the tide of our ocean
the sea in our paradise
was salted with love
the time that we spent in the white
squeeking bed
in Montmartre
Rue Briquet
room number five
was our time in heaven for life
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entry for Jingle’s Thursday rally
Comments on: "Heaven for life" (29)
Great poem, Ina! Wow! I can a theme developing. This is for you:
Thanks 🙂 Nice song!
you stepped back in bed
in your eyes, there it was
in your whisper it went
in your arms it remained
in the feathers flying around us
we found it again
and again
deeper
in lust…
elegant imagery, your words are gentle and magical…
I linked in to old rally or week 36 rally, please comment for about 12 poets to get your work more feedback…will add this piece to the collection I posted yesterday…
Thanks Jingle, I will do my best to comment away 🙂
This is delicious.
I am smiling too at the feathers “Snowing down into the wet street” 🙂
I was out in the wet streets of Leeds this morning – no feathers!!
David
lol Really, no feathers ? Then in Leeds they probably have synthetic pillow stuffings? 🙂 Or they are a bit more carefull with hotel equipment 🙂
Nicely done.
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Thanks Irene!
beautiful poem 😀
Thank you Rajlakshmi!
Heavenly! its just so awesome.. so delicate.. like a song 🙂
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thank you purvi!
Nice one 🙂
really passionate
Thanks hindawy!
Hot. Tickled.
Tickled, but not itchy I hope 🙂
enjoyed reading this very much!
thank you
Thank you for reading!
This is an awesome poem.
Some great images in these words.
congrats on the award
Hi Artswebshow thanks 🙂
dancingfreak, also thank you very much! I am very proud to get so many votes 🙂
a great award for a great poet…
smile all the way.
🙂
Thanks Jingle!
I see why you were one of the winners. That was beautiful!
Thank you very much Lisa! 🙂
i like this ina! thank you for sharing. congrats on your perfect poet award wk 36 and the celebrated poet award.. here’s mine for this thursday.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/02/19/the-tears/
Thanks! 🙂 I liked yours very much!
I like this. I appreciate the way you made the setting seem real. Good.
Congrats’ on your Award! Happy days …
Thank you Jamie 🙂