Love stolen night

~{}~

 

A pub full of people and  you standing there

drinking your last glass of dark coloured beer

The music  not louder than hollow hard  laughter

 

Images fading in smokey thick  air

somewhere in between, we were going somewhere

or was it after

 

An  iron bed with torn and cold sheets

you opened the window to let go the white dove

it silently flew in the dark coloured night

 

Away from the people and away from the laughter

we shivered in a night stolen for love

we shivered in a love stolen night

 

~{}~

 

Comments on: "Love stolen night" (32)

  1. Great poem! Boy…you are really gettin’ your groove on in the poetry dept.!
    enjoy:

    • It is fun to do, play with words and rhytm 🙂 Somebody on Open Salon asked today if I wanted to participate in a Renga. I said yes, so now I have to figure out what it is lol. A sort of haiku series of poems, that are written by more writers, to form one poem, sort of.

  2. Sounds fun! Enjoy yourself!

  3. belfastdavid said:

    I remember a night like that

    But the memory is warm

    David

  4. Hi David, thanks for dropping by 🙂
    Yes such nights are worth remembering…

  5. Away from the people and away from the laughter

    we shivered in a night stolen for love

    we shivered in a love stolen night….

    powerful imagery,
    Thanks for sharing….

    hope to see you link up with potluck poetry tonight…
    cheers,
    xxx

  6. The last lines were great in playing with thoughts and emotions of stolen lovely nights in love… I liked the image and the story so much… thanks for sharing…

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

  7. Thank you Shashi! I am going to your blog right now 🙂

  8. I read: “sadness, acceptance, aloneness”. Nice! Happy Potluck!
    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2010/10/16/the-farming-of-nature/

  9. ah yes, I have had a night or two worth remembering….well done my friend.

    cheers

  10. welcome!
    Glad to see you in.
    Happy Monday.
    xxx

  11. This is gorgeous, as poetry, even though the experience it tells of has a bitterness… You make every word count, the words saying far more than they say (as poetry should), in these lines, for instance:

    The music not louder than hollow hard laughter

    you opened the window to let go the white dove
    it silently flew in the dark coloured night

    Well done!

  12. Thank you so much David, Jingle and gospelwriter! Your friendly comments mean a lot to me and I wish you a great potluck!

  13. Beautiful poem but it does not sound like an “in love” experience. Great imagery, iron bed with torn and cold sheets, laughter that is hollow and hard. I have a few similar memories of pubs filled with people I didn’t really want to be with. Shivered when love should make you warm. I enjoyed your poem.

  14. love the shiver part 🙂

  15. Excellent poem
    The third verse in this set such an atmospheric mood

  16. Thank you very much Artswebshow 🙂

  17. This was so good. It was like watching a movie…and the image of the dove was brilliant.

  18. http://open.salon.com/blog/dave_r/2010/11/28/renga_ii It is about my turn to do a verse of my very first renga, just after Belinda whose turn it is now. This renga has been going on since Nov 29 with 12 participants. But it is my bedtime lol so I am afraid it will have to wait till tomorrow. Hope I can sleep? 🙂

  19. Mental Climax said:

    let the love continue.

    moonlane gardens.

  20. Hi mental climax, thank you for dropping by! 🙂

  21. Hi lacenleahter, thanks very much! 🙂

  22. Evokes a clear picture in the mind. And I agree with Richard (ArtsWebShow) re: the third stanza.

    Nice!

  23. I really like the image of the pub.

  24. Thanks, I’ll buy you a beer 🙂

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